Monday 15 August 2011

Scribblers: The Crater

Scribblers
"The Crater"

by Steffan Alun

1. EXT. GAOLHOUSE ROCK - Day 5. 0800

A rocky island, with a large, intimidating PRISON on it. Drizzly and horrid.

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2. INT. PRISON CELL - Day 5. 0800

A spacious cell, bookshelves all around. By a desk, a WOMAN - twenties, short, wavy brown hair, orange prison gear - reads a tome. The door opens, and in walks HANK the guard with a plate of good food. Hello, Hank.

HANK
Dinner for you.

WOMAN
Yeah, thanks. Just put it down on the side.

Hank walks around, and the woman turns to stare at him intensely. Hank freezes.

HANK
Um ...

WOMAN
Don't flatter yourself, Hank. I'm just wondering whether you remembered cutlery.

HANK
I'll see what I can do.

WOMAN
Give me the book.

HANK
I'm sorry?

WOMAN
Quickly, now, I'm reading.

Slow and uncertain, Hank removes a small book from his pocket.

HANK
It's the one you asked for.

WOMAN
Obviously.

She takes the book.

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3. INT. PRISON CORRIDOR - Day 5. 0801

FINESSE and SHIFT walk confidently through the corridor.

SHIFT
I bet you this goes wrong.

FINESSE
Silence. I won't have negativity for my Dangerous Plan.

SHIFT
No, I'm all for it. I just think it'll backfire. Not in a bad way.

FINESSE
Right.

HANK approaches from the other end.

FINESSE
Sir? We're looking for cell four-two-five.

Hank is horrified.

HANK
You can't!

SHIFT
We've got a pass. We're going to move the prisoner.

Hank clutches his chest.

HANK
Move her? Are you insane?

FINESSE
I'm not asking again. I hate feeder lines.

HANK
Turn right, walk until you get to the nice door.

He shakes his head, and walks on.

FINESSE
Nice to see she's made friends.

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4. INT. PRISON CELL - Day 4. 0802

The WOMAN is now eating her meal, the small book open in front of her. FINESSE and SHIFT enter.

WOMAN
Good morning, scribble women.

FINESSE
Morning.

WOMAN
No menfolk? I take it the news was true, then - they were blown up with half the city.

FINESSE
The city wasn't blown up. As you should know better than anyone.

WOMAN
If it didn't blow up, why can't anyone see it?

FINESSE
That's the thing. I think you can see it ...

She walks closer, intimidating.

FINESSE
... Medium.

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5. EXT. CRATER'S EDGE - Day 5. 0920

FINESSE and SHIFT stand overlooking the crater. MEDIUM is with them, handcuffed, still in her prison outfit.

FINESSE
What do you see, then?

Medium looks out over the crater, and we see her point-of-view -

- the city, still standing, hazy. People on the streets frozen mid-activity.

MEDIUM
It's there. The whole area's fine - just invisible. What a mess you've made! How did you manage it?

FINESSE
An incident with powers. A man who could overload other powers. We assume he hit Wraith.

MEDIUM
Seems reasonable.

FINESSE
So we need you to help us find him.

MEDIUM
Why on earth would I do that?

SHIFT
To help Wraith, maybe?

MEDIUM
Ha!

SHIFT
We met your friend Eraser a while back. She seemed really possessive of Lyric.

MEDIUM
Eraser's a psychopath. I have better things to occupy my time than nemeses and revenge.

FINESSE
Turning over a new leaf?

MEDIUM
My sentence has already been reduced. When I'm released, invisible streets would be an ideal retirement plan. Somewhere only I can see.

FINESSE
If you want to be released early, might I suggest you start by helping us solve this?

Medium frowns, looking down at her handcuffs.

MEDIUM
Two conditions - you take off the cuffs ...

FINESSE
No.

MEDIUM
Fine. Then I'll need awesome clothes.

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6. INT. PIT - MEDICAL BAY - Day 5. 0930

AMITY looking over THE MONK, who is now attached to tubes and an oxygen mask, covered in bandages.

AMITY
We'll fix you, I promise. Once we get Lyric back - he's good at anatomy. There's not a body part he couldn't produce.

She checks readouts from monitors.

AMITY
You don't have to worry. Finesse explained everything. Your powers and stuff - they're keeping you safe, aren't they?

The Monk's eyes look at her.

Pain.

AMITY
I can ... if you want, I can make the pain go away. Not for long - I don't want to cause any more damage, and you've ...
(beat)
You've lost part of your brain. I'm sorry. Do you want me to help? Do you want -

The Monk nods, his eyes shut tight.

AMITY
Okay. Yes.

The Monk takes her hand.

Squeezes.

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7. EXT. CRATER - Day 5. 1000

FINESSE is being led by MEDIUM through the empty streets. Medium is now wearing awesome clothes - a cool khaki jacket and brilliant jeans.

MEDIUM
Why are the people frozen?

FINESSE
Dreamwave's doing. She ...

MEDIUM
Who the hell is Dreamwave?

FINESSE
Founding member of Alternate Vertigo.

Medium stares at her.

FINESSE
You know - the indie superhero group from Cardiff? They saved the Prime Minister last year.

MEDIUM
That is the worst team name I've ever heard.

FINESSE
Whatever. She's keeping everyone frozen in place, dreaming that they're still going about their lives.

MEDIUM
What's the point in that?

FINESSE
To stop them going mad, maybe?

MEDIUM
Why the hell would they go mad?

FINESSE
Haven't you ever read Day of the Triffids?

MEDIUM
I don't read fiction. I see the endings coming a mile off.

FINESSE
Explains a lot.

MEDIUM
You're calling me stupid.

FINESSE
No. I'm saying maybe you'd understand people better if you read.

MEDIUM
I don't need to understand people. I can see what I need to.
(calling into the sky)
Like you, animal one. You think you can hide as a bat?

FINESSE
She's not hiding. She's helping. It's not all about you.

Medium's point-of-view - they've reached Battle Field, part of it still damaged from the explosion on Day 4.

MEDIUM
I turn my back for one minute. Who messed up the field?

FINESSE
We're at Battle Field already?

MEDIUM
I thought we'd take a short cut.

FINESSE
No you didn't. What have you seen?

Medium smiles.

MEDIUM
You really do understand people, then. Fine, I tip my hat to you.

She turns her head to the side, staring at nothing.

MEDIUM
An invisible city, and nobody's hidden as well as you.

Finesse in battle pose -

- an arm in the air and BAT SHIFT swoops down -

- becoming a GORILLA.

VOICE (OOV)
Calm down. It's me.

YŪREI fades into view.

The GORILLA becomes SHIFT.

SHIFT
Yūrei?

FINESSE
Not right! Not right at all! I should've felt your powers.

Yūrei lifts a PENDANT around her neck.

YŪREI
My latest acquisition. I can't stop you using my gift, but I can hide it.

She vanishes and reappears.

FINESSE
Okay. But why are you here?

YŪREI
This was my gaijin, wasn't it? I'm here to help.

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8. INT. PIT - MEDICAL BAY - Day 5. 1005

THE MONK now calm, in bed. AMITY enters.

AMITY
Hi, there. I'm really sorry, but I'm going to have to leave you. Finesse just let me know that things are getting complicated.

She places a hand gently on his bandaged head.

AMITY
Most of our medic friends are on the crater somewhere, so I've had to call in a favour. You'll be in safe hands.

A WOMAN enters - late 20s, black, confident and smartly-dressed. Excellent glasses.

WOMAN
Hello, there, "Monk".

AMITY
I'll be back as soon as I can.
(to the woman)
Thanks.

Amity leaves.

The woman sits by the Monk's bed.

WOMAN
Okay, I can't stand silence, so I'm going to talk a lot. Close your eyes if you hate that idea. No? Good. Well, then. Let's get acquainted. My name is Rebecca Glass.

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9. EXT. COLAN TOWERS - Day 5. 1030

FINESSE, SHIFT, MEDIUM and YŪREI standing together, floating above the crater.

Medium's POV: A tall, dull skyscraper, ugly and ageing.

YŪREI
These are Colan Towers. We need to get to the top floor.

FINESSE
What's up there?

YŪREI
Henry Ball. An old colleague of mine. The only person I've ever met, Finesse aside, who could uncloak me.

MEDIUM
Excuse me!

YŪREI
You can see me. This man could make everyone see me. He could restore the city in an instant. But I need your help to find him.

Finesse hands Shift an INJECTION GUN.

FINESE
A boost of this will make him immune to Dreamwave's powers. Escort them up.
(to Yūrei)
An invisble building makes a good maze, and I can't be sure we can trust you. I'm staying here to make sure we're in control.

YŪREI
I will be as fast as I can.

Yūrei allows Medium to lead the way.

Finesse puts her hand subtly on Shift's elbow.

FINESSE
The building's too tall for me to feel the people at the very top. I won't be able to change you once you're up there, so don't go becoming flowers.

SHIFT
No problem. At least you'll be able to see us.

FINESSE
Yes - but with that pendant, I can only control Yūrei by sight. New rule - stick to her like glue.

SHIFT
Will do.

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10. INT. COLAN TOWERS. Day 5 - 1040.

MEDIUM leading SHIFT and YŪREI up invisible stairs - higher and higher above the crater. FINESSE can be seen floating in the distance.

YŪREI
(to Shift)
Who is this person?

SHIFT
Her name's Medium. She took a serum which gave her the power to see hidden things.

YŪREI
Invisible things?

SHIFT
Anything that's meant to be hidden, I think. Nobody's been able to test the limits. But she was chosen to be Wraith's nemesis.

YŪREI
She is as nothing to your Wraith.

SHIFT
Um, yes. She doesn't really get him, I don't think.

YŪREI
Few do.

MEDIUM
Okay, this door needs a code.

YŪREI
Show me the keypad.

Medium guides Yūrei's hand to the pad.

Yūrei slowly feels the unseen buttons.

Types in the code, hiding one hand with the other.

MEDIUM
Four five four nine A. Hiding it makes it easier to see, you know.

Yūrei looks at her with disinterest.

YŪREI
It matters not what you know. You limit yourself.

MEDIUM
And you are a liar. There is no Henry Ball.

SHIFT
What do you mean?

YŪREI
She lies. She wishes to spread doubt.

She walks through the inisible door.

SHIFT
You're good at hiding things, Yūrei. But for a second then, you panicked.

YŪREI
The Medium frightens me.

SHIFT
I don't think she does. I can read your body language. And she's right, isn't she?

Yūrei vanishes!

Shift becomes a BLOODHOUND.

Next to Medium's head, Yūrei's face appears.

YŪREI
(whispering)
Help me find it, and I will be indebted to you.

MEDIUM
(whispering)
Find what?

YŪREI
(whispering)
You are the Medium, and you would know.

Medium smiles.

Medium POV: A boring grey office, an ugly painting of a boring grey man on the wall. The bloodhound sniffing for Yūrei, nimbly jumping out of the way at each turn.

Medium walks to the painting.

She opens it.

A safe inside.

Medium opens her eyes wider.

She turns the wheel left, right, left.

Opens the door.

Inside is a TINY RED CRYSTAL.

She picks it up.

It's grabbed from her hand, fast.

Invisible POV: Yūrei reappears.

YŪREI
Shift, I am here. I have found what I wanted, and now I will help you save Gaijin.

The bloodhound becomes SHIFT.

SHIFT
(emotional)
Half my friends are lost, and we've got a dying hero in our headquarters, and we've got an entire city frozen in place, and you help us STEAL A FU-

And she's a WOLVERINE -

- shooting towards Yūrei -

- and they both hit a solid surface -

- which shatters!

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11. EXT. COLAN TOWERS. Day 5 - 1043

FINESSE seeing YŪREI and the WOLVERINE falling from the top floor. MEDIUM in the distance, running down invisible stairs.

Finesse holds up her hand -

- and the Wolverine becomes a HAWK.

FINESSE
For serious God.

From the distance, a RED MECHA-SAMURAI ROBOT flies at incredible speed -

- and grabs Yūrei in mid-air.

The hawk lands -

- and becomes SHIFT.

The robot lands -

- and releases Yūrei.

SHIFT
She lied! She's a liar.

YŪREI
I apologise for my deceit -

FINESSE
New rule - you lie to us again, and we steal your things. And sell them on eBay.

YŪREI
This sounds fair.

SHIFT
(calming down)
You're coming up with a lot of new rules today. You'll have to write them down for Wraith.

Yūrei holds up something small and invisible.

YŪREI
Let me earn your trust. This is the Ruby of Ashram, a valuable treasure. I will give it to you until I have rescued your Wraith.

Finesse takes it.

FINESSE
You stole this. Why would we give it back to you?

YŪREI
It is the property of your villain Damien the Impossible. It is the source of his powers.

SHIFT
She's telling the truth. She's not hiding her body language.
(hard stare)
Any more.

FINESSE
And I hate Damien the Impossible. Really, though? All his powers? Even the super-jump?

YŪREI
Even his strange eyes.

FINESSE
I'd have sworn those were contact lenses. Fine. We've got bigger things to worry about now.

Medium arrives.

FINESSE
Go on, you. Lead the way.
(to Yūrei)
And your robot can pull its weight too.

Medium, Yūrei and the robot walk ahead.

FINESSE
(quietly, to Shift)
You can't throw people out of windows, you know.

SHIFT
Sorry. I was vexed.

FINESSE
Wraith wouldn't thank you for killing his girlfriend.

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12. EXT. CRATER - Day 5. 1050

AMITY walking through the invisible streets, blindfolded.

AMITY
(using her communicator)
Finesse? Can you hear me?

FINESSE (OOV)
Amity! Thrilled to hear you.

AMITY
This is strange. Everyone's frozen, but their emotions are all over the place.

FINESSE (OOV)
They're dreaming. Can you use them to navigate?

AMITY
Most of the way, yes. I've blindfolded myself to help me concentrate. I'll need help once I get to the cottage, though.

FINESSE (OOV)
That won't be a problem.

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13. INT. ORMAN LABORATORY/CRATER - Day 5. 1100

MEDIUM and YŪREI lead FINESSE and SHIFT to a specific spot on the crater.

MEDIUM
Here's Wraith.

FINESSE
Yes. I know.

She holds out a hand -

- and the entire lab becomes visible. WRAITH, KYLE, KAYLEIGH, LYRIC and CHRONAL are in their positions from OVERLOAD SCENE 17.

FINESSE
I've only restored this area. We'll need to wake him up to do more.

AMITY arrives, as Finesse crosses over to Chronal to check his pulse.

Amity takes off her blindfold as Finesse nods and stands.

AMITY
Ah, I love being able to see things.

FINESSE
We need a plan of action. We wake up Wraith to restore the city. Then what?

AMITY
Then we get Kyle back to the base.

FINESSE
Back with us? Amity, I don't think we can handle him.

AMITY
It's fine. I called in Rebecca Glass.

FINESSE
No way!
(she smiles)
Brilliant!

YŪREI
Who is this?

FINESSE
Ooh, old friend of mine. Really old friend. But she can block powers.

SHIFT
Is that a good idea with Kyle, though?

AMITY
Thing is, she only blocks your ability to use them. She can't affect your perception. Kyle could get used to seeing the world through new eyes without being dangerous.

SHIFT
Okay, then we get him back to base.

She reveals the INJECTION GUN.

SHIFT
Let's bring our friends back.

She injects Wraith -

- slowly, carefully -

- and pulls the trigger.

Wraith opens his eyes.

WRAITH
What happen?

FINESSE
Can't you feel it?

Wraith closes his eyes.

WRAITH
No way! The entire city?

SHIFT
Half of it.

Shift indicates the ground.

Wraith sits -

- and then lies down.

Shift rests the gun, still in his arm, on the ground.

YŪREI
You have not made life easy, Gaijin.

WRAITH
Oh, cool. You're here.

Medium approaches him.

MEDIUM
Wraith.

WRAITH
No! Epic fail! No! Get her out.

MEDIUM
Oh, quiet. I'm not your enemy. I don't care about you.
(she walks forward as she speaks)
At least, I didn't. I was never interested in other people. But your friends have shown me how wrong I was. They haven't stopped searching for you. They worked so hard. I realised the importance of friendship.

She stops, right next to him.

MEDIUM
And Wraith, if it's not too much to ask, I'd just ...

She puts a hand on his arm.

Suddenly - she grabs the gun.

MEDIUM
I'd just like this.

She dashes towards Kyle's bed -

- and plunges the injection gun into his arm.

MEDIUM
So this is the guy you're desperately trying to keep sedated?

FINESSE
Don't be an idiot. You can see what's hidden? Look at the pain and power in that man's head.

Medium looks at him.

MEDIUM
Whatever. We're going to work this out, and if you don't listen, I pull the trigger.

WRAITH
We really didn't need another villain, guys.

MEDIUM
Wraith's kindly built me an invisible city. We're bang in the middle of the valley of the blind, and I am king. You know I won't let you restore it.

She looks at Amity.

MEDIUM
I can see what you're doing, you know. You can't hide anything from me. Oh, yes, lovely chemicals flying around my brain. Tedious. If you could just see the way the mind works - oh, you'd never let it control you. Self-loathing? It's a conjouring trick.

SHIFT
We'll fight you and win, you know. I've got a menagerie on my side.

Medium stares at her.

MEDIUM
You're right. I can see that. You'll never let me have the city.
(she sighs)
Fair enough.

She pulls the trigger.

AMITY
No!

She runs to Kyle -

- puts a hand on his head.

KYLE
Amity?

AMITY
Kyle. I'm here.

Shift is now a GORILLA -

- but Yūrei gets to Medium first -

- kicks her down so she's kneeling -

- holds a sword to her neck.

KYLE
The pain's gone. Is that you?

AMITY
Yes. I'm sorry. I know this is my fault, but I'm going to make it better. I've found someone who can help you.

KYLE
(indicating Medium)
Who's she?

AMITY
She's pushing her luck.

KYLE
I can feel her powers. She can ... see. The things she can see.

MEDIUM
You have no idea.

KYLE
How do you bear it?

MEDIUM
I love it.

KYLE
I can see so clearly now. All the pain. Can't you see it?

MEDIUM
I don't really care.

FINESSE
Right, we need to get him back to Becca.

She crosses over to Kyle -

- takes the gun.

MEDIUM
(to Yūrei)
You'd rule too, you know.

YŪREI
You have lost. Take it with good grace, or fight me.

MEDIUM
In all this time, nobody asked - how did you navigate the invisible city before we found you? I can see what you're hiding. Some device that lets you see the unseen?

WRAITH
The mirror. The mirror you had in your cottage.

MEDIUM
Side with me. Half a city to ourselves.

YŪREI
I already rule.

She moves the sword closer to Medium's throat

YŪREI
Not everyone wants what you want, observer.

MEDIUM
Then what do you people want?

FINESSE
You'll never know.

YŪREI
I want treasures. I want my collection. I want the rarest, the most powerful items in the world. I want to find every last one of them.

MEDIUM
You could probably do with an assitant who can see every secret, then.

Yūrei pauses -

- and turns to Finesse.

YŪREI
Make me a better offer.

FINESSE
Oh, God, here we go.

YŪREI
The observer would have me betray you in return for countless hidden treasures. You must know that I would accept this offer. You must offer something better.

FINESSE
I'm hired by the government! I can't negotiate with you!

YŪREI
The Ruby of Ashram - the stone you hold. It has the power to store and bestow powers. It can copy the powers of its holder, and subsequent holders can use those powers. Copy your own, manipulator, and I will forever side with you.

FINESSE
Well, you know. Obviously not.

YŪREI
Then I will take Gaijin's.

WRAITH
Aw, what?

YŪREI
True invisibility - and the ability to conceal other things.

Kyle reaches out a hand -

- nudging Finesse.

KYLE
(whispering)
Agree to this. I can finish this.

Finesse - torn.

Eventually, she pulls the RUBY from her pocket.

FINESSE
Alright. As long as it doesn't harm him, you can have Wraith's powers.

WRAITH
Lame.

YŪREI
Bring the stone to me, Gaijin.

Wraith stands slowly, painfully.

He takes the stone from Finesse.

Approaches Yūrei and Medium.

MEDIUM
Nemesis! I've missed you, here at gunpoint.

WRAITH
Dude, shut up. Why are you even here?

MEDIUM
Your friends brought me. And you can stop that attitude. I can see right through you.

WRAITH
Use the sword, Chink!

MEDIUM
Oh, as if. She won't do it. She was never going to do it. And you wouldn't either.

She looks him in the eye.

MEDIUM
I can see it all, you know. Every detail of your mask. Every stray hair on your costume. The reflection of my face in the pupils of your eyes.

Kyle stands.

Reaches out -

- ZAPS Medium with purple lightning.

Zoom into Medium's eyes -

MONTAGE: A baby in the womb.

A new-born baby.

Child in a cot.

Young Wraith, first day in school.

Childhood images.

Secondary school.

University.

Wraith the Scribbler, fighting.

Scenes from previous episodes, intercutting, fast.

Arriving at the cottage -

- struck by lightning.

Back in the room.

Medium out of breath, sweating, crying.

FINESSE
(panicked)
What did you do to her?

KYLE
I overloaded her power. Her eyes have finally been opened.

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14. EXT. ORMAN COTTAGE - Day 5. 1110

FINESSE, AMITY, SHIFT, WRAITH, CHRONAL, LYRIC, KAYLEIGH, YŪREI standing outside the cottage, KYLE and MEDIUM in straightjackets.

YŪREI
My cottage is better than this.

FINESSE
I don't even get your cottage.

YŪREI
Can I have my ruby back?

FINESSE
No.

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14. INT. PIT - MEDICAL BAY - Day 5. 1230

REBECCA GLASS watching over THE MONK. FINESSE enters.

FINESSE
Becca!

GLASS
Darling!

They hug.

GLASS
It's been far too long.

FINESSE
Lovely to see you again. And - sorry to talk shop so soon, but there's someone I'd like you to take a look at.

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15. INT. THE PIT - Day 5. 1250

CHRONAL, LYRIC and WRAITH sitting on the sofas.

FINESSE walks in, pushing in THE MONK in a WHEELCHAIR.

FINESSE
Okay, guys, I'd like you to meet the Monk.

WRAITH
Dude, worst day ever. He's going to kill us all or something.

FINESSE
No he isn't. We don't listen to Spoiler Man, remember?

LYRIC
He's definitely trustworthy, then?

FINESSE
Definitely - and don't be rude, he's right here.

WRAITH
Hello!

FINESSE
Oh, and he doesn't talk, sorry.

Chronal gets to his feet.

Indicates to Finesse -

- and they move to one side.

CHRONAL
There must be a reason you trust him. What is it?

FINESSE
We've talked. Well, I talked - he wrote. And I can't say more than that. This has to be off the record.

CHRONAL
Okay. So it's a work thing?

FINESSE
It's a work thing.

CHRONAL
And he's definitely fine.

FINESSE
I promise.

Chronal smiles.

He turns to the Monk -

- and shakes his hand.

CHRONAL
A pleasure to meet you at last.

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16. INT. PIT - CONTROL ROOM - Night 5. 0300

SHIFT staring at computer screens. LYRIC enters.

LYRIC
On the computers at three in the morning. Dare I ask?

SHIFT
The Monk.

LYRIC
Yep, me too.

SHIFT
I mean, Finesse must be certain. But ... we searched everywhere for him. He didn't exist. Now? He's everywhere. A full history. He's been around for years.

LYRIC
We're thinking he's with Retcon, then?

SHIFT
Must be. He must be rich, too. They keep mentioning this.

She points to the screen.

A photo of an ABBEY.

SHIFT
This is his home.

LYRIC
Wow.

SHIFT
And ... I'm sure Finesse knows what she's doing, but I really think we ought to check this place out.

LYRIC
I'm with you. Let's make it happen.

Final shot of the web page.

Heading: THE MONASTERY

17. INT. PRISON CELL 2 - Day 6. 1200

KYLE is lying on the bed.

There's a knock on the door.

REBECCA GLASS enters.

On-screen caption: ONE MONTH LATER

GLASS
Hello, Kyle.

KYLE
(weakly)
Hi.

GLASS
I've got some good news. The guards think you're making excellent progress, and they're happy for me to take charge of you.

KYLE
(distressed)
I'm happy here. It's good. Nobody comes.

GLASS
It's the next step. And we've got a private room set up for you, and you'll have support around the clock.

KYLE
In your house?

GLASS
No. You'll like it, don't worry. It's a school.

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18. INT. PRISON CORRIDOR - Night 7. 2100

HANK leads FINESSE through the corridor.

HANK
She's changed, I'll tell you that much.

FINESSE
For the better?

HANK
She's easier to handle, I'll give her that.

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19. INT. PRISON CELL - Night 7. 2100

Close-up on Medium, at her desk, drawing furiously.

HANK (v/o)
But we don't know what's come over her.

Zoom out to reveal the cell covered in artwork.

Wraith style.

1 comment:

Quoth the Raven said...

Gaolhouse Rock! I LOL'd.

Oh, so many things to love in this script, I can't remember them all. I adore the Finesse/Shift interaction throughout, definitely including the private reprimand for the window thing (although really, Shift, we Do Not throw people through windows. That's lesson one.) Loved your take on Medium; loved Yurei's return (I made her! And she's back, look! Yay!) And I absolutely lovelove loved Finesse's ability to understand people because she reads, versus Medium's total inability because she thinks seeing is enough. Ha.

Well, Kyle is sorted, and the sinister Monk has arrived - he's the bloody headmaster, yes? Of the EvilSchool? I love how much I trust neither of those characters at all, but Finesse does implicitly. What a dichotomy.

Massive thumbs up to the extremely feminist nature of this script, though. Very good work. You even removed the automatic flapping about and wailing for their presumed dead Scribbly men; starting from a point where they've already worked it out is inspired. Very strong script, well done.