Killing myself laughing! House of Janus! Twins! Of course! Utterly supurb. I'll admit I sighed a bit at the 'eight months later' aspect, but that's purely personal choice; I've never been a fan of stories that jump around their chronology (and yes, I'm also looking at you, Homer.) Much love for Helen's swirly swirly cloak, also.
The time jump is a bit of a deliberate conceit for the time being because the actual Carnival day has a different ending and I wanted this bit to be seperate.
I have no problem with jumping around in time if they're self-contained stories. Or at all, actually, unless they're bad stories, in which case quality is more of a problem than time jumpy fun.
Enough discussion of this! Really exciting scene. Love the angles, and the pace.
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This is awesome, BTW - can't wait for the next one! Love the voices and how clear it is which is which!
Killing myself laughing! House of Janus! Twins! Of course! Utterly supurb. I'll admit I sighed a bit at the 'eight months later' aspect, but that's purely personal choice; I've never been a fan of stories that jump around their chronology (and yes, I'm also looking at you, Homer.) Much love for Helen's swirly swirly cloak, also.
The time jump is a bit of a deliberate conceit for the time being because the actual Carnival day has a different ending and I wanted this bit to be seperate.
I love all the Carnival stuff. Although, if you're going to do a side-story, you might as well use Captain Rat. I have an abiding fondness for him.
I liked Helen's swirly cloak too- I thought that was particularly pretty.
I have no problem with jumping around in time if they're self-contained stories. Or at all, actually, unless they're bad stories, in which case quality is more of a problem than time jumpy fun.
Enough discussion of this! Really exciting scene. Love the angles, and the pace.
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